[ogsa-wg] Minor comments on documents

[Hiro Kishimoto]

Hi Andreas, Jem, Abdeslem,

I agree with Andreas. How about the following?

"which are written and maintained by the OGSA-WG or the appropriate
domain-expert working groups"

Thanks,
----
Hiro Kishimoto

Andreas Savva wrote:
> Jem, Abdeslem
> 
> I think it's inappropriate to mention design teams in this context, 
> since they do not have a formal role. The document itself would be 
> labelled as the output of the working group, not of the design team.
> 
> Treadwell, Jem wrote:
> 
>> Hi Abdeslem, my first thought was that that's too low level, but we do
>> mention design teams elsewhere in the doc, so I've added it to both of
>> these bullets.
>>
>> Thanks,
>>
>> - Jem
>>
>>  
>>
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: owner-ogsa-wg at ggf.org [mailto:owner-ogsa-wg at ggf.org] On Behalf 
>>> Of Djaoui, A (Abdeslem)
>>> Sent: Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:20 AM
>>> To: Treadwell, Jem; Hiro Kishimoto; Steven Newhouse; Tom Maguire
>>> Cc: ogsa-wg
>>> Subject: RE: [ogsa-wg] Minor comments on documents
>>>
>>> Jem
>>>
>>> After your sentence
>>>   
>>>
>>>> Service Description documents, which are written and     
>>>
>>> maintained by the   
>>>
>>>> appropriate domain-expert working groups,
>>>>     
>>>
>>> Should you add "or design teams" at the end. I am raising this 
>>> because for informations services there is no plan to form a WG.
>>>
>>> Abdeslem
>>>
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: owner-ogsa-wg at ggf.org [mailto:owner-ogsa-wg at ggf.org]On Behalf 
>>> Of Treadwell, Jem
>>> Sent: Wednesday, June 22, 2005 3:21 PM
>>> To: Hiro Kishimoto; Steven Newhouse; Tom Maguire
>>> Cc: ogsa-wg
>>> Subject: RE: [ogsa-wg] Minor comments on documents
>>>
>>>
>>> Hiro/Steve/Tom,
>>>
>>> My comments also embedded...
>>>
>>>   
>>>
>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>> From: owner-ogsa-wg at ggf.org [mailto:owner-ogsa-wg at ggf.org]     
>>>
>>> On Behalf   
>>>
>>>> Of Hiro Kishimoto
>>>> Sent: Wednesday, June 22, 2005 9:29 AM
>>>> To: Steven Newhouse
>>>> Cc: ogsa-wg
>>>> Subject: Re: [ogsa-wg] Minor comments on documents
>>>>
>>>> Thanks Steven,
>>>>
>>>> My comments inline <HK>.
>>>> ----
>>>> Hiro Kishimoto
>>>>
>>>> Steven Newhouse wrote:
>>>>     
>>>>
>>>>> OGSA WSRF Basic Profile 1.0 (v018 June 13th 2005)
>>>>>
>>>>> Page 1: Status of this memo
>>>>> Is there not a WSRF missing from this opening line?
>>>>> e.g. '... write normative OGSA services based around the
>>>>>       
>>>>
>>>> WSRF set of
>>>>     
>>>>
>>>>> specifications.'
>>>>>       
>>>>
>>>> <HK>
>>>> Good catch! Your text works for me.
>>>> </HK>
>>>>     
>>>
>>> JT: I'll leave this one for Tom, as he has the pen again right now.
>>>
>>>   
>>>
>>>>> OGSA Roadmap (v010 June 6th 2005)
>>>>>
>>>>> Section 2, Point 1, Bullet 3: Should these service description 
>>>>> documents not be 'owned' by the working group developing
>>>>>       
>>>>
>>>> the service?
>>>>     
>>>>
>>>>> The text implies to me that the OGSA-WG writes them...
>>>>>       
>>>>
>>>> which I don't
>>>>     
>>>>
>>>>> think is the case.
>>>>>       
>>>>
>>>> <HK>
>>>> Good point. Let's add something like "domain-expert WG writes this 
>>>> service description (scenario document) if appropriate."
>>>> </HK>
>>>>     
>>>
>>> JT: Here's my update, in line (I think!) with Hiro's suggestion:
>>>
>>> * Service Description documents, which are written and maintained by 
>>> the appropriate domain-expert working groups, describe the services 
>>> in the area in natural language, listing the interfaces and 
>>> operations defined by each service.
>>>
>>> * Scenario documents, also written by domain-expert working groups, 
>>> demonstrate how these services can implement the use cases, using a 
>>> combination of natural language and UML.
>>>
>>>   
>>>
>>>>> Section 2.2:
>>>>> Should there not be some statement that OGSA profiles should be 
>>>>> developed/revised outside the OGSA-WG in theor own WG?
>>>>>       
>>>>
>>>> <HK>
>>>> I think they can if their Profile abide by OGSA branding guideline.
>>>> </HK>
>>>>     
>>>
>>> JT: I inserted this text at what is now line 199, *before* the para 
>>> beginning "Members of the OGSA-WG":
>>> OGSA Recommended and Informational Profiles may be developed either 
>>> by the OGSA-WG or by domain-expert working groups, but it is 
>>> important to note that they must adhere to GGF's forthcoming OGSA 
>>> branding guidelines, which are discussed in section 2.3.
>>>
>>> Let me know if you see any issues with this, as I'll be posting this 
>>> for final call very soon.
>>>
>>> Thanks!
>>>
>>> - Jem
>>>
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