[loa-bof] LoA-RG Draft Charter - Inviting for Comments

[Blair Dillaway]

This looks pretty good overall. I just have a few suggestions.

1. Remove 'access control' from the last sentence of the first paragraph. Access control is typically used as a general term encompassing authN, authZ, and auditing. So listing it as a peer of these concepts is strange.

2. In Section 2, you need to add expected milestone dates for the proposed deliverables that align with the information on the OGF living charter form.  These are 'First Draft'. 'Public Comment', and 'Publication'.

3. In the first paragraph under "Scope of the Group", it says "indirect transmission of assertions (through services or delegation)".  This is the first time the term 'assertion' is used. I suggest you relate it back to the concepts in the summary material. Perhaps use wording such as "authentication assertion" or "authentication security token".  Also, "services" and "delegation" aren't comparable terms. Perhaps use "through services or user proxies".

Regards,
Blair

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Ning Zhang [mailto:nzhang at cs.man.ac.uk]
> Sent: Monday, April 02, 2007 10:57 AM
> To: David Groep; loa-bof at ogf.org
> Cc: Yoshio Tanaka; Mike 'Mike' Jones; Michael Helm; Stephen Pickles;
> Nate Klingenstein; Blair Dillaway; Alan Sill; Christos Kanellopoulos;
> Darcy Quesnel; ning.zhang at manchester.ac.uk
> Subject: LoA-RG Draft Charter - Inviting for Comments
>
> Dear Colleagues,
>
> I here attach the draft version of the LoA-RG charter for inviting your
> comments.
>
> Two files of the same document are attached here - one word file for
> those who dread pdf, and one pdf file for those who dread MS word.
>
> We (Yoshio and me) are looking forward to receiving your comments and
> views....on the document.
>
> Best regards
>
> Ning
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> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "David Groep" <davidg at nikhef.nl>
> To: "Ning Zhang" <nzhang at cs.man.ac.uk>
> Cc: "Yoshio Tanaka" <yoshio.tanaka at aist.go.jp>; "Mike 'Mike' Jones"
> <mike.jones at manchester.ac.uk>; "Michael Helm" <helm at es.net>; "Stephen
> Pickles" <stephen.pickles at manchester.ac.uk>; "Nate Klingenstein"
> <ndk at internet2.edu>; "Blair Dillaway" <blaird at microsoft.com>; "Alan
> Sill"
> <Alan.Sill at ttu.edu>; "Christos Kanellopoulos" <skanct at physics.auth.gr>;
> "Darcy Quesnel" <darcy.quesnel at canarie.ca>
> Sent: Thursday, March 22, 2007 9:31 AM
> Subject: Re: LoA-RG formation progress: seven questions
>
>
> > Hi Ning, Yoshio, all,
> >
> > Ning Zhang wrote:
> >> Thank you for the draft. To make the reading easier, I have copied
> >> your email into a word file and used the track tool to add my
> >> comments - please see the attached.
> >
> > Since the last update of the seven answers in early February, there
> > has not exactly been the flurry of activity on the LoA-RG.
> > I don't think there is a huge gap between the answers and what needs
> > to be done to complete a charter, but it does need to be written down
> > in the proper format and be discussed on the LoA BoF mailing list so
> > that we as ADs can formally propose the group and get it approved. We
> > can then spend the time in Manchester also for topic discussions on
> > the documents instead of discussing only the charter.
> >
> > For the charter, the following pieces are still needed (drafts can be
> > extracted from the answers to the 7 questions):
> > - Brief Group Summary (public description for print and web site)
> > - Group Focus & Scope (2-4 paragraphs)
> > - Exit Strategy
> >
> > And for each deliverable:
> >   - title
> >   - Abstract: (very brief)
> >   - document type
> >
> > May I propose that the chairs and/or document authors trigger this
> > discussion on the LoA BoF mailing list?
> > (note that it must be on the list to allow public participation, but
> > it's better to come with a first draft so as to focus the mail
> discussion).
> >
> > The Wiki page at:
> >
> >
> https://forge.gridforum.org/sf/wiki/do/viewPage/projects.sec/wiki/LoAI
> > nitiative has Ning's updated version of the seven questions as an
> > attachment, which can serve as a basis for the charter discussion.
> >
> > Best, and thanks a lot,
> > DavidG.
> >
> >
> > --
> > David Groep
> >
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