[fi-rg] Comments to our latest document

[Thijs Metsch]

Hi,

Thx for your reply, I'll tune the text a little bit according to your  
suggestions.

Have a good one,

-Thijs

On Sep 11, 2008, at 11:54 AM, Gian Luca Volpato wrote:

> Dear All,
>
> I have spent some time reading and reviewing our latest document  
> "Requirements on operating Grids in Firewalled Environments". My  
> opinion is that the outcome is very good and will represent a solid  
> ground for the work to be done in the newly created FVGA group.
>
>
>
> Just some small remarks, mainly editorial issues that I prefer to  
> discuss in our group rather than writing them in the OGF web form:
>
> - page 1: the numbers of the chapters is wrong. It goes from 1 to 4  
> and then starts from 2 again.
>
> - page 2, section 1: why should the last paragraph ("Some  
> application use ..." ) not be considered as a 4th category of grid  
> applications, i.e. the category of the applications which use  
> obscured dynamic ports?
>
> - page 4, section 2.1: here we reference a paper from the D-Grid  
> project that is written in German. The paper itself is a good  
> information source, but is it OK to provide reference written in a  
> language other than English?
>
> - page 10, section 2.7: the paragraph after Figure 5 says that  
> incoming SOAP messages are decrypted before entering the gateway  
> system. Which component performs the decryption? How can this  
> component access the key used for the message encryption?
>
> - page 11, section 2.7: is it possible to reformulate the 3 bullet  
> points at the beginning of the page? The sentences within  
> parentheses look like comments from the author. The message to be  
> conveyed is clear, but it is expressed in a very short form.
>
> - page 15 and 16, Glossary: we provide explanations for 3 terms that  
> are never used in the document: DWDM, GPFS and IPSec. Shouldn't we  
> remove them?
>
>
>
> Kind regards
> /Gian Luca
>
>
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