[cddlm] FW: [ggf-editor | Submit GGF Draft - 1558] CDDLM Deployment APIs

[Toft, Peter]

Hi Folks,

Steve's on vacation until next Monday. He'll get onto this when he gets
back.

Well done to all on these document submissions.

Cheers,
Peter

> -----Original Message-----
> From: owner-cddlm-wg at ggf.org [mailto:owner-cddlm-wg at ggf.org] On Behalf
Of
> Milojicic, Dejan S
> Sent: 30 August 2005 17:48
> To: Loughran, Steve
> Cc: cddlm-wg at ggf.org
> Subject: [cddlm] FW: [ggf-editor | Submit GGF Draft - 1558] CDDLM
> Deployment APIs
> 
> Hi Steve,
> 
> Below is the feedback we received from GGF editor. Will you be able to
> look at these? Is there anything that you need help with from the
team?
> 
> These are primarily minor, editorial things, he gives you credits for
> your work! Congratulations!
> 
> Thanks,
> 
> Dejan.
> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: sf-httpd at forge.gridforum.org
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> On Behalf Of Sourceforge Tracker Monitor
> Sent: Tuesday, August 30, 2005 10:03 AM
> To: dejan at hpl.hp.com
> Subject: [ggf-editor | Submit GGF Draft - 1558] CDDLM Deployment APIs
> 
> 
> Greg Newby changed 1558 on 2005-08-30 09:02:48
> 
> Status has changed: - New: 'Returned to Author(s)'   Old: 'Initial
> Editor Review'
> Priority has changed: - New: '4'   Old: '5'
> Assigned To has changed: - New: 'John Tollefsrud'   Old: 'Greg Newby'
> Group has changed: - New: 'Management'   Old: 'old-SRM'
> Resolution has changed: - New: 'Remind'   Old: '<None>'
> 
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> Summary: CDDLM Deployment APIs
> Project: EDITOR
> Tracker: Submit GGF Draft
> Artifact ID: 1558
> Category: Recommendations Track
> Group: Management
> Status: Returned to Author(s)
> Resolution: Remind
> Priority: 4
> Last Modified By: Greg Newby
> Last Modified: 2005-08-30 09:02:48
> Submitted By: Dejan
> Submit Date: * 2005-07-07 05:56:49
> Assigned To: John Tollefsrud
> File(s): ggf-cddlm-deploy-api.doc
> Description:
> This document describes CDDLM Deployment APIs. The CDDLM framework
needs
> a deployment API for callers to deploy services described in the
> component model languages. This API must support remote access for
> deployment, terminating existing deployed systems, and for probing
their
> state. This document defines the WS-Resource Framework-based
deployment
> API for performing such tasks. It is targeted at those who implement
> either end of the API.
> 
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> Comment By: Greg Newby (2005-08-30 09:02:48) Thanks for this
submission.
> I have several items I would like to be fixed or responded to before
> moving this document to the next phase of the review process.
> 
> First is that the header states this is an informational track
document
> (GWD-I), but the tracker has Recommendations track submitted.  Which
is
> the intent of the working group?
> 
> For these other comments, use the template in the Editor tracker, or a
> recently published GGF document, as an example:
> 
> Second, please fill in the compete information for the 13 Editor
> section.
> 
> Third, "12 Security" should be "12 Security Considerations."
> 
> Fourth, the references nearly all need a lot of work.  References need
> to be complete:
> - author (or corporate author)
> - title and (if applicable) volume
> - publication location (for online sources, the
publisher/organization's
> location)
> 
> For online materials, they may only be cited in the References section
> if they are persistent documents - not to Web sites or other transient
> content.  For citation fo something like a WG's homepage or
> organization, use an inline reference or footnote, for example, in
text:
> "The Global Grid Forum (http://www.ggf.org)," instead of putting the
> hyperlink in the References section.
> 
> I don't think *any* of the references are complete, and several are
> simply hyperlinks that don't belong in the References section.
> 
> Here is the rule of thumb for references: you need to provide
sufficient
> information so that a future reader (say, in 10 years) can use your
> reference to find the exact same document you used in your authoring.
> If it seems unlikely the same document will be available (for example,
> because a Web page will have changed), then this might be a better
> candidate for inline citation or a footnote.
> 
> Fifth, the GGF logo, copyright statement and IP notice are misplaced
> (see the sample documents), and you don't need to include the logo.
> 
> Sixth, page footers are missing except on the first page (they don't
> need to be on the first page, but should be on the other pages).
Email
> address, also page number.
> 
> Seventh, the Status and Abstract headings don't match the rest of the
> document, or the GGF's other samples.
> 
> I'm sorry for this big list of changes.  As you see, none of them are
> focused on the content -- it's all about the presentation &
formatting,
> consistently with the GGF standards.
> 
> I did read the content, too -- to me, this appears to be a
well-written
> document, and presents valuable information.
> Once you have re-submitted with the above suggestions addressed, we'll
> continue to advance it through the editor pipeline as specified in
> GFD-C.1.
> 
> 
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